Second draft

Although this is a huge improvement from my first draft I feel as though it is too busy and develops the plot too quickly for it to be the first 2 minutes of a film. In order to rectify this, I have decided not to introduce any characters in my final draft of my film opening.

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second draft from Florence Gardner-Hillman on Vimeo.

first draft (very rough)

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first v.rough draft from Florence Gardner-Hillman on Vimeo.

The feedback I received from my, very rough, first draft highlighted that i needed to create a more ominous atmosphere by making a lot of the longs duration shots into short duration shots and creating jump scare shot. In addition to re-filming some footage,I need to add in titles as well as my ident which will be evident within my second, more polished, draft.


We created and planned a storyboard for our film openings so we had a rough idea of which camera shots and where we would film. I decided that I would have the movie opening in black and white so that it could create an old fashioned and eery atmosphere.